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Snape Ophelia i promised you on the SSS message board to review your novel when i'd finished it. So here's my review.

Never had i read a fanfic before with an OC. After reading so many SS/HG ships i wanted something refreshing. And boy was this novel something indeed.
The moment i started reading Chapter I it was like reading in my own private diary. Maybe you don't know it but Annwyd is very much like myself. So it was
strange at first to read something so close to me but it was a fine ride. It felt really good. I knew perfectly how she would react and feel in certain circumstances.

I think you've portrayed Annwyd pretty good. You have let us, the reader, get to know Annwyd very well, by your vividly description. Excellent character development. Perfectly done. I hope you will write more about the history of Glamour Casting. And the grandfather of Annwyd is written by such warmth, quietude and love. Please write more about him, maybe by flashbacks so you can add something of the history of Glamour Casting.

Too bad the title page is currently down. But luckily i saved it in my documents and it's my background picture now . Very beautiful.

Your novel is best to be compared to a song of the 'Faerie Bards'. I could not only visualise it like watching a painting to its finest details but also feel the angst, burning, tension and sensualism of the characters.

It's very refreshing to read a novel written by Annwyd's point of view and Severus's point of view. It's very interesting to watch him thinking, knowing what goes on in his mind. And most important, at least in my opinion, Snape is in character with his inscrutable demeanor in your novel. We don't know anything about his past (yet) and what driven him to join Voldemort and become a Death Eater.

But i think you've filled the gap in his secretly past by going back to his student days and give a twist in your own thoughts of what might had happend with great insight. And yes, i agree that Snape might have felt not appreciated by his talents and he found someone who did appreciated his aptitude for Potions. All he want after all is recognition. The flashbacks was something i really liked in your novel.

The lemon part in your story was an explosion of sensualism. I can't describe how i felt when Severus got lecherously over Annwyd. He was an excellent
Dom. Of course i was preparing myself for the lemon part and listened to Enigma's Mea Culpa as background music.

I can tell you it was sheer erotica. I couldn't help feeling lustful by the heat and violence between Annwyd and Severus. I do hope Part II contains more dom/sub.

I think Annwyd is not only a nervous fidgety girl but she is a strong personage with a powerful mind, capable of many things. And she matches Severus. Any woman matching Severus has to have a strong personality and intellect. Annwyd fits it perfectly.

Are you perhaps thinking of a future to be a writer or are you a student in literature or letters? Because your vocabulary is profoundly and your grammar is flawless.

In the final analysis, this is a objet d'art. An outstanding story line with passionate interactions. Thanks for sharing this with us.

++DevonSeverus++